10 responses to “Rand Paul: Ron Paul Surging at the Right Time”

  1. Punctuation Nazi

    7. Whatever you do in terms of style: BE CONSISTENT [like your candidate]. This transcript is not! Sometime there’s a comma after “So, I mean,…” other times there isn’t. Sometimes you write “we’re/they’re/he’s” sometimes you use “we are/they are/he is” etc… it’s full of inconsistent style, this looks like it’s been written by 4 different people.

    Summa summarum: as you can see I’m what they call a grammar AND punctuation-nazi… and English isn’t even my first language. Point is, I’m a professional screenwriter and if I don’t follow these guidelines (I wouldn’t call them rules, because that implies they’re absolutely true, which isn’t the case) my script doesn’t get produced/sold or even read… my job is to keep the reader glued, to make what I write a “page-turner” and this is similar to what your candidate has to do… he has to be intelligible to everyone, he has to sound right and say the right things but the transcript also needs to READ well for the very same reasons. These are obviously (!) all minor details (except the two errors I pointed out at the beginning) but they DO make a difference and they’re easy to correct. People don’t generally IGNORE these things (which is fine with me), they don’t notice them (when they write) and never thought about it. They say: rules are made to be broken… but to break them you need to know them.

    Truly yours,

    The Punctuation Nazi [Ministry of Disinformation]

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  2. Punctuation Nazi

    5. In the same sentence there are various punctuation issues as noted above, combining to make it quite hard on my eyes, this is my version, note the COLON… I also took the liberty of cutting one “and” in favor of a period… people often say “and” when in writing you’d have a new sentence. It’s also considered “proper” to put the period INSIDE the quotes and NOT outside.

    “…this.” instead of “…this”. – the former is correct, the second is not!

    “Ron Paul is the only one getting significant independent vote and Democrat vote. Every year I watch the elections and people say: “You need independent vote to win the election, you can’t win with just Republicans.”

    More in the same style [spelling errors corrected too]

    “…So, I actually see Ron Paul as the one Republican who could reach across the boundaries of party, collect a lot of people who don’t vote normally and really energize the party. Look at the crowds, he says his crowds are growing by the hundreds and then you interview someone like Santorum, who’s got 5 people and they’re telling him to be quiet because they’re watching the football game! So, I mean, Ron Paul is having these big, huge crowds in Iowa and is really exciting a lot of young people – and new people – so I think there is a lot of momentum and I think he could win by bringing in independents.” etc.

    6. Next up is the big question: how far do you want to go in correcting people’s grammar? One extreme is to transcribe everything “ad litteram” including errors (which should be marked with [sic] ), the other extreme – which I favor – is to add things that are implied, correct things that aren’t grammatically correct in order to make them more readable. If you want to get the message across, if you want to be credible, if you want to make a good impression I strongly believe this is the better approach. The last paragraph is a good example: you made a 1:1 transcript but many parts are barely intelligible if you read them without listening to the audio! This whole paragraph could be made so much better by “tweaking” it just ever so slightly: a comma here, a period there, a conjunction or two – hell – maybe even shifting around the verb/adjective to make it more legible. This is a question you have to decide, I can only give you my (professional) advice.

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  3. Punctuation Nazi

    3. Use hyphens… for some reason people forget they even exist… this is what “you” wrote:

    “… I thought your dad was the darling of the evangelical Christian vote, which is such a big vote out there, and a lot of conservatives. …”

    “… I thought your dad was the darling of the evangelical Christian vote – which is such a big vote out there – and a lot of conservatives. …”

    In with the hyphens – out with the comma ;) [yes, actually it's a dash and not a hyphen but it does the job nonetheless]

    4. In the sentence: “Ron Paul is the only one getting significant independent votes and Democrat votes.” – I hear “vote” singular not plural… IF that’s what he says you might want to transcribe as vote[s]

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  4. Punctuation Nazi

    About the transcript, found two big mistakes in ONE sentence.

    “Look at the crowds, he says his [NOT he’s] crowds are growing by the hundreds, and then you interview someone like Santorum who’s got 5 people and they’re telling him to be quiet [NOT quite] because they’re watching the football game!”

    Minor comments:

    “…Rick Santorum really caught the momentum and he’s been closing [in] fast here in the last two days…”I would add “[in]” because it’s more readable and that way, although technically it’s correct the way it is.

    Minor details:

    1. Try not to start sentences with AND/OR… there are plenty of those in there and they’re really an eye-sore. I generally prefer long sentences with punctuation (or even hyphens) to make the more readable rather than starting a sentence with “And…” / “Or…”

    2. This is highly debatable but I question the “wisdom” of placing commas in front of a conjunction (and/or)… speaking as a writer the conjunction substitutes for the punctuation, it sets the pace and it divides sentences. Although it feels natural to put a comma in those places it doesn’t make much sense…. if you have to, place the comma AFTER the conjunction, example:

    “we’ve had several people surge to the top and, I think this is the best time to be surging”

    Again: ONLY IF YOU REALLY HAVE TO PUT THAT COMMA THERE, the sentence is fine without!

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  5. tymewarrp

    my name is Ben Smith, I am from California, where last election I voted for Obama as a Dem, U have since registered as an independent, due to the fact that Obama did not live up to his words. Right now, I am seriously debating switching to Republican, just so this man can have my vote. He is the ONLY hope for this country, and I think we all need to be proactive in our efforts to get him in a position to effect change. Mr. Paul, you have my vote.

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    1. ProudTEX

      @tymewarrp Don’t feel bad your not the only one. I was also fraudulently fooled by Obama too. Even the people who rewarded him the noble peace prize got fooled too. So don’t feel bad. Welcome to Ron Paul strict way of constitution. We are not crazy about republican or democrats we are just die hard constitutionalist and libertarians and Ron Paul happened to lead the way in the most profound way.

      Ron Paul 2012.

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      1. tymewarrp

        @ProudTEX@tymewarrp I do not feel bad, I feel great. When I see all the things and hear when the man speaks, I am eager and hopeful in a way that is reminiscent of the Obama fad, but knowing that Mr. Paul has the experience and wherewithal to actually do what he says, I think the whole two party system construct is meaningless. With NDAA, and the collapse of the American way of life, We The People, must make choices that give our citizens the best chance to pursue happiness, Mr. Paul is that choice. I don;t feel bad, I am excited for the possibilities.

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        1. ProudTEX

          @tymewarrp welcome and happy new year.

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        2. tymewarrp

          @ProudTEX@tymewarrp i will be happy when President Paul takes office.

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        3. ProudTEX

          @tymewarrp click on a button says donate and chip in to the cause dude.

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